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UNIVERSIDAD PEDAGOGICA EXPERIMENTAL LIBERTADOR

INSTITUTO PEDAGÓGICO “RAFAEL ALBERTO ESCOBAR LARA”

MARACAY. EDO ARAGUA

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Love has been known by writers, singers and songwriters (Shakespeare, Lord Byron, The Beatles and others), as the most beautiful feeling of all. Flushed cheeks, clammy hands and a racing heart beat are some of the outward signs of being in love. But it is inside the body where definite chemical changes are being produced as signs that indicate internal variations. According to recent studies about this feeling, scientists have found that it is a succession of chemical reactions produced by hormones that are released by the hypothalamus into the brain. One of the best known researchers in this area is Helen fisher of Rutgers University in New Jersey, who in the year 2004 published a study titled “The Three Chemical stages of Falling in Love”. In this study the author portrays love as the product of the interaction of several hormones in the brain; therefore love, more than a felling is a biochemical reaction due to the specific effect some hormones have in the brain.

One of the first hormones involved is dopamine, which has been commonly associated with the pleasure system of the brain, providing feelings of enjoyment and reinforcement to motivate a person to perform certain activities. It is also an important part of the biological drive to choose a mate, because love as a fact is a primitive drive like hunger and the biology of love helps account for how people focus on one particular person. This view of love is based on observations of passionate behavior across cultures and most recently findings by scientists studying the human brain. In this same line Helen Fisher did some research using magnetic resonance imaging (MRI) machines to peer into the brain of colleges students in the early stages of love, and obtained the first direct evidence that the mechanisms of love activates particular areas of the brain with a high concentration of dopamine and this hormone is closely tied to states of euphoria, craving an addiction. At the same time dopamine in this stage is associated with another agent norepinephrine, and this two hormones can have effects like heightened attention and short term memory, hyperactivity and sleeplessness. When people are first in love, couples show the signs of surging dopamine and norepinephrine; increased energy, less need for sleep or food, focused attention in the smallest details of the novel relationship.

On the other hand, people in love have been known to have low levels of serotonin, which is one of love’s most important chemicals and has also been associated with chemical imbalances such as depression, anxiety and insanity. This explains why people in love are usually depressed. These effects resemble drug effects on the brain, therefore they are bound to lose the kick and fade quickly in the first three years or so. Then the cravings, the depression and the anxiety go away and the brain activity goes back to normal.

Now when it comes to the part of commitment and long lasting love there are two important hormones that are released by the nervous system that play a role in social attachments. These hormones are oxytocin and vasopressin. The first one is released by the hypothalamus gland by both sexes during orgasm and it is thought that promotes bonding when adults are intimate. Ergo the theory that the more sex a couple has, the deeper their bond becomes. Vasopressin has a similar effect, it cements the bond between the two people, creates devotions towards the partner and the instinct to protect one another from new suitors (jealousy).

Andi Arias

Magella Caraballo

Israel Alvarez

Carmen Quintana

Oswaldo Mellado.

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This recent studies reveal that it is basically a rush of dopamine and serotonin that directs a trigger to the brain causing the sensation of feeling in love and with that also comes sexual desire. Love can be driven by the sex hormones testosterone and estrogen. Although testosterone is not confined only to men, it plays a major role in the sex drive of women. When people fall in love they can not think about anything else but their love. They might even lose their appetite and need less sleep, preferring to spend hours at a time daydreaming about their new lover.

In the attraction stage, a group of neuron-transmitters called “monoamines” play an important role: Dopamine – also activated by cocaine and nicotine- produces a sense of happiness and excitement; Norepinephrine – otherwise known as adrenaline- it makes us sweat and gets the hearth racing; and Serotonin- one of love’s most important chemicals and one that may actually makes us feel out of control.

One of the first hormones involved is dopamine, which has been commonly associated with the pleasure system of the brain, providing feelings of enjoyment and reinforcement to motivate a person to perform certain activities. It is also a love hormone that is an important part of the biological drive to choose a mate, because love as a fact is a primitive drive like hunger and the biology of love helps account for how people focus on one particular person. This view of love is based on observations of passionate behavior across cultures and most recently findings by scientists studying the human brain. In this same line Helen Fisher did some research using magnetic resonance imaging (MRI) machines to peer into the brain of colleges students in the early stages of love, and obtained the first direct evidence that the mechanisms of love activates particular areas of the brain with a high concentration of dopamine and this hormone is closely tied to states of euphoria, craving an addiction. At the same time dopamine in this stage is associated with another agent norepinephrine, and these two hormones can have effects like heightened attention and short term memory, hyperactivity and sleeplessness. When people are first in love, couples show the signs of surging dopamine and norepinephrine; increased energy, less need for sleep or food, focused attention in the smallest details of the novel relationship.

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English VI Sec:801
Authors:
Caraballo Magella
Arias Andi
Alvarez Israel
Mellado Oswaldo
Quintana Yogrexi
INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH

Love has been known by writers, singers and songwriters (Shakespeare, Lord Byron, The Beatles and others), as the most beautiful feeling of all. Flushed cheeks, clammy hands and a racing heart beat are some of the outward signs of being in love. But it is inside the body where definite chemical changes are being produced as signs that indicate internal variations. According to recent studies about this feeling, scientists have found that it is a succession of chemical reactions produced by hormones that are released by the hypothalamus into the brain. One of the best known researchers in this area is Helen fisher of Rutgers University in New Jersey, who in the year 2004 published a study called “The Three Chemical stages of Falling in Love”. In this study the author portrays love as the product of the interaction of several hormones in the brain; therefore love, more than a felling is a biochemical reaction due to the specific effect some hormones have in the brain.

Comments about the introductory paragraph

When you say "several studies" you should specify at least one those studies so your essay has theory support.

Do not use contractions

What is the origin of sexual instincts?. Does it have a chemical explanation?. Are feelings involved? or is it just about hormones?.

Acording to several studies the root of emotions, including sexual instincts, is about hormones. This hormones affect the primitive brain or the hipotalam.

And what about love?.

When it comes to love so much has been said about it, but again studies reveal that it is basically a rush of dopamine and serotoninel that directs a trigger to the brain causing the sensation of feeling in love and with that also comes sexual desire. Although is not necessary to feel in love in order to want to have sex, it has more to do with reproductoty instincts which are seen on animals as well.

The purpose of this essay is to define what are all the other hormones that provoque reactions and what are these reactions.

Carmen Quintana

Israel Alvarez

Andi Arias

Magella Caraballo