UNIVERSIDAD PEDAGOGICA EXPERIMENTAL LIBERTADORINSTITUTO PEDAGÓGICO “RAFAEL ALBERTO ESCOBAR LARA”MARACAY. EDO ARAGUA
Reading and writing 1
Sec. 801
MONEY AND HAPINESS
Most of the world population believes that money has the ability of give then happiness. They are convinced that money can bring then all the things they have ever wanted, they also believe they would be happier if they had more cars, houses, clothes.
Most of the world population believes that money has the ability of give then happiness. They are convinced that money can bring then all the things they have ever wanted, they also believe they would be happier if they had more cars, houses, clothes.
But recent studies have proved that this is not real and in fact it is the opposite. These new studies take a sample of one hundred lottery winners and ask then questions about there life days after they won the lottery and again one year later. The answers were very different but they all had something in common. They where less happy than before they won the lottery. They all had more problems and less people they could trust, most of their friends had turned their back on then because they did not want to give then money, also some of the marriages had broken up because of the differences they had deciding what to do with the money and in what they should spend it on.
Some of the families even loose all the money they won, and return to the same state of finance as they were before. The experts believe that this happens because they don’t have the financial knowledge they need. Therefore they spent all their fortune in mansions, cars, clothes and in a highly expensive lifestyle. They do not invest the money so sooner than later they ran out of money. There are a few cases in which they even loose more money than they had so they are force to declare them selves in bankruptcy.
The studies concluded that unless you had no money at all, money won’t make you happy, and if you have more money, you will have also more responsibilities.Money isn’t the root of all evil. As the bible says “the love of money is the root of all evil”. And also the sure way to unhappiness.
Some of the families even loose all the money they won, and return to the same state of finance as they were before. The experts believe that this happens because they don’t have the financial knowledge they need. Therefore they spent all their fortune in mansions, cars, clothes and in a highly expensive lifestyle. They do not invest the money so sooner than later they ran out of money. There are a few cases in which they even loose more money than they had so they are force to declare them selves in bankruptcy.
The studies concluded that unless you had no money at all, money won’t make you happy, and if you have more money, you will have also more responsibilities.Money isn’t the root of all evil. As the bible says “the love of money is the root of all evil”. And also the sure way to unhappiness.
Author
Israel Alvarez
4 comments:
Hi israel, I like the topic of your essay, is very interesting but be careful with the spelling, you wrote "Most of the world population believes that money has the ability of give then happiness" Remember than the pronoun for they is "them", then is another word.
*"Recent studies have proved that this is not real and in fact it is the opposite."
Where did you get this information from?
Where is your Thesis Statement?
I hope it helps in order to improve your essay, you have a good idea but you need to organize it a little bit better.
Hello Israel!!!
I think you have a good topic; but, first of all you didn't stated your thesis statement, what is important because it is like a road map for the paper,consequently depending on what your essay is going to be focus,you can improve your supporting and concluding paragraphs.Moreover,It would be interesting if you put in your introduction a real fact or a quote.If you rearrange it a little you are going to have an excellent essay.
hi honey! I like your essay. I think that it is really good and I am totally agree with you. bye! kisses :)
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